hi every one!
here's part of my book review. it's not done of course and i would like you to comment on how i can make it better.
Joey Willis is about 12 years old. She misses the sounds that she heard when she could hear. The beautiful sounds of birds chirping and the sound of the waves are still in her memory. She lives in Fort Bragg with her brother, Luke, her father, Ray and her beloved mom, Ruth. Her mom is the only one who Joey can hear (in her mind). Her mother is very protective and keen about Joey doing well in school. She will not allow Joey to learn sign language, so Joey has to struggle with reading lips. Sometimes, Joey can’t read them, so communication is hard. Luke is a young, energetic boy who Joey adores. She plays with him, and in the book, she hugs and kisses him while he screams and kicks. Ray is her stepfather. He has a long mustache, so Joey can’t see his lips and can’t talk to him. Ruth needs to translate. But now she seems to be pulling away. In the book, “The only person Joey had ever trusted completely was her mother and she felt like Ruth was pulling away. She couldn’t understand why adding Roxy, Charlie, and Sukari to her life might mean breaking the bond she and her mother had.” Roxy is her best friend, because Roxy’s mom is deaf, but Roxy is Joey’s only friend. But everything changed when Joey went out to pick mushrooms. She went into territory she’d never gone before. She met Dr. Charles Mansell (Charlie) and his chimp, Sukari (Sue-car-e). Charlie is a kind old man who understands Joey’s deafness, for both his parents were deaf. Sukari was a baby chimp that Charlie took in to prevent her from going into research labs. Charlie is very angry toward the suffering chimpanzees go through in shows and experiments. Charlie and Sukari both know sign language and Joey’s world is glowing with possibilities. But her mother will soon find out about the secret that Joey tries to hide… There are many parts in the book. One part which stirred my emotions was when an earthquake happened. It really caused many thoughts to run through my head. After the earthquake, Sukari ran over to Joey’s house. Urgently, she pulled Joey and her family in the direction of Charlie’s house. What they find… you need to read. What will happen to Sukari?
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I think add another quote maybe, and a few more examples!
otherwise, good job
k. thanks izzi. let me see what quote i can find. but for which one?
for multiple parts you could find quotes. Some signifigance to the quotes make it better
thanks izzi! im going to go find one
Good luck on finding some!
k. i found some. here:For example, “She’d (Sukari, the bold is Charlie writing) already been sold to an amusement park. Joey watched his writing grow darker. Others are sold to animal traders who in turn sell them to rich fools who collect wild animals as pets, or to research labs, where most of them end up anyway.” Then, he says, “That’s not the half of it. They’ve been used in the space program, sent into orbit…His face was getting red.”
good and now maybe some more complex sentences!
Ruth needs to translate. But now she seems to be pulling away.
That could be a compound sentence
ok! thanx. but i sent it to ms.justic already
aaw kk :)
cant you print it and change?
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